Chateau Lloyd

We're coming down the home stretch for A Man of Destiny.  The edits are done and now I'm formatting it for publication and putting in the added touches.

One of those is the the blurb - the teaser text that goes on the back of the book and the advertisement.

This is always tricky because you want it to be short enough to get attention but not too short.

Here is what I have at the moment.  Let me know what you think:

The Commonwealth is in crisis. 

A feckless political class has left it paralyzed in the face of economic stagnation and growing popular discontent.  The leaders of four thousand settled planets squabble over control of the tottering machinery of government while the frontier worlds seethe with rebellion.

It is in this environment of escalating violence and shifting allegiances that planetary representative Maxim Darius makes his move.  He is a man on a mission, assured of his abilities and certain of his destiny to lead.

But what is that destiny?  Can the Commonwealth survive it?

The first volume of the “Commonwealth Destiny” trilogy is a tale of intrigue, conflict, love and betrayal.  It is A.H. Lloyd’s most ambitious project to date, drawing upon his own years of experience inside politics and the military.